Checkup Before His Doctor Visit (L)
This story has some strong language (L).
Sitting around my desk area, I played with my wet pussy while thinking of something special to write. An MH commenter had requested more creamy details about one of Jim’s and my sex games. Fortunately, while all lathered up, a great story came to me (š), and I’m glad it did.
This event occurred about a year ago on the morning of Jim’s annual dermatology exam with his “favorite” doctor. He shared with me why she holds this distinction: “She’s funny and has a great rack,” (but not as great as mine.) “And her long legs go all the way up to her ass,” he added. We are so confident in our exclusive relationship that we make such cracks often. It goes both ways.
It was getting time for him to leave for his 9:30 appointment, so he was in the shower. I was horny that morningāno big surprise for creamy Patty, right?āand decided I would give him a sexy sendoff. So I stripped naked, sat on the floor at the foot of our bed, and waited for him. Meanwhile, I raised and spread my legs and fingered my cunt. Mmmmm, it felt too good.
As Jim entered the room naked with a towel around his neck, I said, “I have a gift for you before you see your ‘favorite’ doctor. Now bring me that thick cock and make it disappear down my throat.”
“Oh, my God,” he replied, his cock already standing at attention. “You look so hot, and your cunt is dripping wet. I hate even leaving you now.”
“Enough talking. I’m dying to suck you dry, so bring it to me and fuck my face hard. You can shake any cum ropes I can’t swallow on my tits, and I’ll rub it in as I’m cumming.”
Jim’s eyes rolled back in his head as he plummeted my open mouth with his hard tool. He fucked my face as instructed, hard and deep! I reluctantly took one hand away from my clit and softly squeezed his balls, and seconds later, he began to shake. He grabbed the back of my head with both hands and thrust his meat even deeper.
I couldn’t help gagging a little as a river of hot cum shot down my throat. It was so deep I didn’t even get a sweet taste until Jim pulled out and shot more warm ropes on the hard nipples he cherishes.
“Oh, my God, that was the best climax I ever had!” Jim said as he rolled onto the bed, his cock soft and reduced in size to about 2/3 of what it had been. “After I rest a minute, I’ll eat that sopping wet pussy of yours,” he promised.
I just pulled three fingers out of my pussy and said, “Open up for Creamy Patty,” then wiped the inside of his mouth with my juices. He licked my fingers so he wouldn’t miss any of my creamy cum.
“I have to get going too, so be sure to say hi to your favorite doctor for me, sweetheart,” I said while wiggling my hot ass as I left the room.
Needless to say, he gave me a thorough checkup when he returned, paying special attention to all the areas that only he knows to achieve multiple intense orgasms!
CreamyPatty, I loved this story! So sexy of you to give your husband surprise fellatio before he had to leave! I donāt want to start expecting it but for two years in a row my Melodie has given me a ābirthday presentā of amazing oral sex on HER birthday. Surprise oral is an amazing experience. We are on vacation in a themed room & my wife has surprised me over & over again with very sexy behavior and VERY unique intimate behavior including some intense oral sex! (both repetitive fellatio & long drawn out & yummy cunnilingus).
Well, LovingMan, sounds like you two are adventurous and dedicated to making your marriage strong and sexy! Thanks for the kind words and I look forward to reading about your theme experience. Hi to Melodie.
Hey MH readers, well, judging from the minor response to my first story submission, I get the feeling my language was a bit too vulgar. If so, I apologize. Seems the quality of my writing does not equal the quantity of my sexual desires.
I may just stick to reading. Thanks!
Don't do that! Sometimes the stories just don't generate the comments you think they would…but I for one put a favorite on this one and I would love to see more of your stories.
Donāt stop sharing your stories! I enjoy how much you like swallowing Jimās dick!! Iām sure he canāt get too much of that!
Dear CP (Hubbie here): First, thanks for both hot stories. Your "unfetteredness" (?) is a great example and a real turn-on. Some thoughts on your stories and comments …
* I was confused by your "… the minor response to my first story submission", which I think was "My Kind of Facial Recognition (L)" on 7/30. That had 12 comments, and a high rating. I take it you were not referring to this "Checkup Before His Doctor Visit (L)" story. MH is right on this one, give it time. More will come. And if not, so be it. You're a good, hot writer. Keep going for your own passion-outlet. My first (and only so far) story got decent score, but not nearly the comment response I expected. Oh well. C'est la erotica.
* Sexually free language is a huge turn-on, and distinguishes us from uptight society and historical church "properness". Phrases like "man parts", "lady place", his "member", her "sacred garden", etc. are all so stilted and show (whether true or not) a resistance to the letting go that is so necessary for good, wild fucking between husband and wife. Your language was not vulgar, it was sexually real. That's good writing.
* I would offer two style "things" to consider, relatability and repetition …
1) Relatability – even if you are multi-orgasmic, always horny, and have a creamy pussy, and Jim has a 9" cock, not everyone is like this and can relate. I know creative writing does say to be very descriptive, but the more specific an author is, the more of her reader population she may be disconnecting with.
I think this is incredibly hot, "I couldnāt help gagging a little as a river of hot cum shot down my throat. It was so deep I didnāt even get a sweet taste until Jim pulled out and shot more warm ropes on the hard nipples he cherishes." But for those of us with shorter cocks, and women with robust gag reflexes, these may be details that exclude rather than include. Just a thought.
2) Repetition – I get the very creative Nom De Passion, CreamyPatty. Stay with it, it's great. But in this story, you use Creamy Patty twice, and creamy once, and it seemed overly gimmicky. There are some authors on MH that constantly repeat their signature phrases, and I kind of glaze over and lose interest when I read it. There's nothing "wrong" with it. It's just can interrupt the effectiveness of the story communication. Just another thought.
In all, I appreciate the heat of your writing, and your many comments (and Jim's as well). All I can say is keep on fucking and writing. Rinse, repeat! Blessings and passion to you both.
– Hubbie
I'd just point out that those "softer" euphemisms are an important step in just being able to discuss sexual issues for some couples. It lowers the shock value, thereby lowering resistance to discussions that very much need to take place.
#1. You two have a beautiful relationship. Open and honest that is first always. Secondly, this was a very hot story. I am typing one-handed now stroking to orgasm so thank you for this beautiful hot erotic story.
Please do NOT stop!!!
Also, it's only been up for a day, and in the middle of the week, at that. Stories are on the front page for almost two weeks, so I'd give it a little time. In just one day, 38 people have given you 4.7 out of 5 stars. I wouldn't take it too hard.
Thanks, MH. Guess I'm a pain, 'eh? (;)
And thanks, to the others for the support
By the way, I haven't heard back on the rewrite I did on my story, "C Talk"
Wow, Hubbie, what a thoughtful and on the mark critique of my writing style and content. I appreciate you for taking the time to convey your heartfelt opinions- and for encouraging me to continue. I especially take note of your thoughts on my ārelatability.ā Truth is, Jim has such an exceptional cock that it may sound unreal or bragging when I describe what he or I do with it, so I may want to back off a bit while sharing.
My ultra strong urges to suck his cock comes primarily from my desire to please him and I know how he cherishes my loving skills that I believe I have mastered over the years. I guess I really love the power and control this oral talent affords me.
Again, thanks for your comments!
Two things about the perceived ālack of responseā. Over the past year (at least) I havenāt been commenting as much. People go in ebbs and flows with reading and commenting. Also, it seems more common lately for my reading to be part of foreplay with my husband, so soon after reading or while reading, I have other distractions and a quick rating is all I have time to do before focusing on my husband.
I totally get it and I hope I can help. š and your hubby focus is commendable!
Donāt stop writing! Your writing is well done and intense! Intense sex is good. I am a volunteer MH editor who edits once in a while. When I edited one of your stories I was anxious for it to be posted so I could give it 5 stars & make a positive comment.
Sometimes readers just are too busy to comment. As far as ratings, Iāve had highly rated stories at 4.5 to 5 stars and Iāve had stories rated 2.5 stars. I sometimes feel unappreciated but I feel like Iām writing to help other people rejoice in the blessings of married sex.
I also write to give hope to people that even as seniors with health problems- married sex can be a comfort, it can be incredibly intense, & even when you have to modify your sexual activities it can still be fulfilling.
I love your comments to our stories too. They are appreciative and kind.
By the way Melodie & I had a spectacular time at the themed room. Iām working on a story about it. It will be my 80th story on Marriage Heat!
So keep on loving & keep on writing!
You are truly special LM – and I will continue. Thanks for the encouragement!
I think its been 10/12 years ago that I was taking my husband to have his vasectomy performed. We were ready early and we had some time before we had to leave; I was all dolled up pretty nice for my husband & teased him a little. I told him I wanted all of his cum one last time since he was getting snipped. Talking him into letting me suck his cock was easy. I enjoyed sucking him off & gratefully received his cum as my gift & off we went for his procedure. When he was called back, I was allowed to go back with him & witness the procedure. The nurse was there to assist & hubby was already shaved so she didn't have as much to do. As the nurse prepped him, I was watching very carefully and saw plainly what the nurse & the doctor could easily witness. Wrapped around most of my husband's cock was a beautiful display of my luscious red lipstick. And I wasn't embarrassed at all !!
Really pleased you werenāt embarrassed by the lipstick. It showed you were a loving couple who had no problems in their sex lives.
Our Doctor asked us whether we had any problems with sex when we went for the initial consultation about me having a vasectomy. We both agreed we found our sex lives very satisfying!
Your story made my dick really hard, and I was busy stroking while reading your story. Keep it up.
Iāll keep it up so that you can BIgblackd! š
If your screen name is any indication, it will be a real challenge keeping you up bbd! š (sorry, couldnāt resist)
Wow, talking about leaving an impression! š Very cool!
š¤©š¤© building the pressure as we speak š
Very hot. I've been reading your stories to my wife every Saturday morning when she drives me to work (we're down to one car presently). Before I go in, we get all hot and bothered reading these.
Glad you enjoy them Daisy, and itās awesome that you get really horny following the reading!